I woulda given you a 4 maybe a 5 if it weren't for that noise, just because that commercial is annoying and its funny for a ytmnd, however that noise ruins it...2
Haha wierd, and I wouldn't normally 5 something like this, but its got blue gender music, which roxors my boxers...fix the sound origin, theres sposed to be an L in BLUE :)
Pretty well done, slow down the 3rd and 4th story a bit, missed the last few lines. As for the downvoters, maybe they are scared of what you said? Haha
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